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| Anis and I at Dufan |
Anis
is one of my friends who have a kind heart. First of all, she always help me
when I need her help. Another reason, she always lets me to take a rest in her
boarding house after we finish our class. A third reason she belongs to a kind-hearted
girl is because she usually brings my favorite foods after she visited her home
in Tangerang. Afterwards, she lends me money when I forget to bring it. Finally,
she takes care of my health, for she always reminds me to avoid spicy food
because I can easily get a very delicate stomach when I eat that. For that
reasons, I believe that she is a very kind girl.
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Good paragraph, heflin! U stated the topic sentence and concluding sentence clearly that I can see it contains the coherence and unity too. However, u still make mistakes in the use of S&V agreement. For example, Anis- who have, she always 'help'. Mind ur grammar in the next writing, ok. So glad to read this. Excellent:-)
BalasHapusOMG,I miss typed for word 'help', but I actually still confused in the first sentence. I wanna say that I have a lots of kind-hearted friends, then Anis belongs one of them. So, I confused for using Have/Has..
BalasHapusneed your help.
Thanks a million ^^